he fed her visions

of that enticing road

painted starry dreams

in the hollow dungeons

of her despair

 

to Eden, to Eden

his melodious chant.

she bit the fruit;

he had swallowed

the serpent long back…

 

a ruthless resident

in his dark veins

it etched the epitaph

of his marriage

with the salt beads

of their delirious passion

 

and now it scripts

a malicious dirge

on the stiffened corpse

of a relationship

nailed in the coffin

by his infidelity

 

where does

the circle begin?

where ends?

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35 responses »

  1. Varun Reddy says:

    Didn’t get the poem one bit, and the comments didn’t help either. I guess it was a bit too feministic for me…

  2. Indrani Talukdar says:

    Sorry, I had meant marvellous. Its a marvelous poem, Shernaz.

  3. Indrani Talukdar says:

    Marvekous, in one word.

  4. J S Broca says:

    dear shail ji,just logged in to check if shernaz had commented on my comment on her poem “full circle”. i was pleasantly surprised to see your lovely comment there.thanks.shail,instead of addressing me as JSB (sounds KGB agent like !) can you not graduate to my first name jatinder or jitoo, as shernaz calls me ? or you can first switch over from this jsb to mr.broca and then try other suggestions if you are comfortable.no compulsions though.as you like it.all the best.keep smiling.
    jatinder.

    • I too don’t actually like the image of you as a KGB agent:) So, if you agree to call me Shail instead of Shailji, I will address you as Jitoo. With due respect….for all your lovely light hearted views about life…

  5. J S Broca says:

    Dear Shernaz,another powerful poem from a creative genius like you.However,circles to me seem endless running around after something you desire a lot but which you can never achieve.Some people don’t believe in A and E.To them,Adam and Eve are like imaginary numbers, like the square root of minus one… If you include it in your equation, you can calculate all manners of things, which cannot be imagined without it.Further,I don’t think both A and E ever had a talk as a couple since conversation between Adam and Eve must have been difficult at times because they had nobody to talk about.I do however subscribe to the view that-Eve was not taken out of Adam’s head to top him, neither out of his feet to be trampled on by him, but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected by him, and near his heart to be loved by him.Do you subscribe to this view? On a lighter note,I would say that the modern man is always in trouble because of some woman ! It all goes back, of course, to Adam and Eve – a story which shows among other things, that if you make a woman out of a man, you are bound to get into trouble.The latest theory going around is that with our knowledge of modern-day genetics, we realize that it was possible for God to place the potential for all people throughout history into the genes of Adam and Eve when He created them.Did God not know about genetics then or what. Keep it up !
    -J S BROCA

    • Hi JSB,

      Taking the liberty form Shernaz, to comment on your comment for her lovely poem, if it weren’t for such light (greatly thought of, actually) views like yours the world would be a serious place to live in indeed.

      Thanks!

      • Shernaz says:

        Thanks Shail. Jitoo is truly one of those who keeps people around them smiling, even laughing at times, with his light-hearted views. His mission is to bring smiles on others’ faces and he succeeds at it.

    • Shernaz says:

      Good of you to drop by and comment Jitoo. As Shail has already posted a reply to your comment I will just say thanks, or I might get into a ‘serious’ discussion about all the things you have said 🙂

  6. Geetashree Chatterjee says:

    Nothing to feel sorry about, Shernaz. As somebody said to me if a poem disturbs that itself means the lines have had an effect on the mind…………..prodded the reader to think……….so I suppose that speaks volumes for the poem and the poet(ess) who has penned it!

  7. Shernaz says:

    Now I must post something ‘sweet and soft’ so as not to be thought of as a ‘ruthless’ wordsmith 🙂 Thanks a ton, Om Prakash.

  8. vimala madon says:

    the ‘stiffened corpse of a relationship nailed in the coffin by his infidelity’ – awesome description of betrayal in love.

  9. A ruthlessly beautiful piece of poetry, as usual!

  10. Dear Shernaz,

    Once again you have shown that when Shernaz takes to the pen/keyboard, she just spills emotions and reflections onto the page. And no ordinary emotions this….

    Lovely poem Shernaz. Nobody else could have expressed it better.

    • Shernaz says:

      You are ever so lavish with your appreciative words, Shail. They are a real shot in the creative arm. Greatly obliged.

  11. Geetashree Chatterjee says:

    “he had swallowed the serpent long back” a phrase which evokes many unpleasant images…….but I think that itself makes the poem so dark, dismal and brooding. I could feel a tinge of the devil creeping unaware into the male and female figures poisoning their relationship, though the logic may be that the making and breaking of a relation are in the hands of the ones involved in it.

    Shernaz, once again a discerning, disquieting poem which only you can pen so perfectly.

    • Shernaz says:

      You are so right, Geeta. Every relationship is sustained or broken by those involved in it. The serpent, the devil, the angel…all live in the mind. I am sorry my words have had this disquieting effect on you more than once.

  12. connetta says:

    very inspiring to read…

  13. deepika says:

    What to say? I’m speechless, and pondering to figure out the begning and the end of the Full Circle.

    • Shernaz says:

      Thanks for reading and commenting Deepika. Trying to figure out the beginning and end of a circle makes us too run around in circles.

  14. Sonal Shree says:

    Brilliant and powerful. Agree with Smitha, the lines will surely haunt for quite some time.

  15. nadi says:

    yes, Sneha i agree.
    Shernaz, please keep writing, girl!

  16. Smita Luthra says:

    Very powerful words. Loved reading the poem.
    The line
    “it etched the epitaph

    of his marriage

    with the salt beads

    of their delirious passion”
    is going to haunt me for some time. Amazing!

    • Shernaz says:

      Smita, often something you hear or read about has such a great impact upon your thoughts that they spill out in powerful words. Grateful for your comment.

  17. beyniaz says:

    Great poem. Liked it a lot.

  18. vimala ramu says:

    An excellent piece as usual,Shernaz

  19. Sneha says:

    Lately, feminist studies criticize the view that it was Eve who led Adam to temptation.

    I like the open ended-ness of your poem. Well written. Very post-modern.

    • Shernaz says:

      Thanks Sneha. I do not know what genres my poems belong to…I write them as they come to me, remembering to stay faithful to the original thought and emotion during the editing. Glad you liked it.

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